Score: 2

"Keep em coming, Lava"

submission: [SG] Too Far

date: April 14, 2009

+1 Voices / sound
+1 for lip sync (It's a first for you!)
+1 for some humor
+1 For drawings and such.

-1 For the obnoxious penis. Yes, Cake is a douchebag but we dont need to spread his gayness into our eyes.
-1 For using obvious google images.

Advice:
The sound got out of sync towards the end- I'm not sure why. Are you using the "Event" sound? Set it to "Stream" instead. If you don't know what i'm talking about i'd be happy to show you.

The ending itself was abrupt. If your flash is going to be short, it needs to be short for a reason. Not because you were lazy. Put something radical or funny at the end. Like a giant explosion. You know what i mean.

Also, come on. You can draw a simple car (Box with four wheels?) and a grandma. It's not that hard. Something like a gun is a little harder to get to look just right, so that would be justifiable if you used some google images or w/e there.

All these things i've touched on are just a FEW things you could improve in your next flash. The thing i'm excited about is that you ARE, in fact, improving. I'd like to see you take this further for the sake of the gang.

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Score: 2 / 10

Score: 3

"Obnoxious..."

submission: clicker ver 2.0

date: April 2, 2009

Pros:
+3 I actually laughed a little. I don't know why.
+1 The game was just the right length.
+1 A boss fight.

Cons:
-1 The music drove me insane.
-1 The game wasn't extremely interactive.

Advice:
I like how you tried to make the most of your click game. That's always good. Now expand on that.

Also, it looks like you're using "Event" music. Down on the properties bar, where it says "Sound", look for a drop down menu that says "Event". Change that to "Stream". It'll keep the music from starting over if you go to the beginning of the flash.

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Score: 3 / 10

Score: 2

"The classic stick fight."

submission: Muay Thai Fight

date: April 2, 2009

Pros:
+3 For "fluid" animation.
+1 Some humor.
+1 Sound effects.

Cons:
-1 It was way too short for a stick fight animation.
-1 The music was horrible. Very scratchy and unpleasing. Contrasted too much with the crystal clear sound effects.
-1 No epic stick fight battle which i have come to expect. In other words, if you're going to do something unoriginal you need to do it GOOD.

Advice:
Extend your movie. Do new things. Maybe a story or something. Anybody who has seen "Xiao Xiao" knows that this movie is mediocre. Also, i'd advise putting in a preloader and "Play" button.
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Score: 2 / 10

Score: 7

"Ok..."

submission: If you seek...

date: April 2, 2009

Pros:
+5 For the good frame by frame animation and effects.
+1 ... the trippy music
+2 There was a bit of a story.
+2 The girl was drawn very nicely.

Cons:
-1 The guy was not drawn nearly as well as the girl.
-2 It was unoriginal. Borderline uninteresting.

Comments:
I understand the flash was very symbolic and all but... i'm not all for movies that just have some trippy music in the background and a shaky / blurry camera. i don't think it makes for a good movie.

Advice:
But.. style is style. So i won't pin you down for that.

However, we've all seen the theme of "finding true love" before... Give us something original.
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Score: 7 / 10 (Good)

Score: 1

"Continue?"

submission: Tekken: Fighting Jinpachi

date: March 29, 2009

Pros:
+1 For some frame by frame animation.
+1 Sound and Voice

Cons:
-1 Overall quality was poor.

Advice:
The sound was really scratchy and low quality, you definitely need to find better sound clips or up the sound quality when exporting your flash. Also, while black and white is great- coloring shows that you put in just that much more extra effort. Try some color next time. It's not scary.
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Score: 1 / 10

Score: 7

"Cuz he's the hungry muthafuckin caterpillar"

submission: Hunger of the Caterpillar

date: March 29, 2009

Pros:
+3 That was funny.
+2 The animation style was cool.
+1 For the voice acting and sound effects.
+1 The art was ok.
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Score: 7 / 10

Score: 0

"Uh... no..."

submission: Congrats, Tom and April

date: March 29, 2009

This is the type of thing you upload and post on forums to show people. Not a flash movie to post on Newgrounds.
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Score: 0 / 10

Score: 2

"Keep trying."

submission: Give Me Some Skin

date: March 29, 2009

Pros:
+1 It had some funny in it.
+1 For what little animation there was, it was ok.
+1 For sound and voice.

Cons:
-1 The whole thing could've been better.

Advice:
Are you using "Event" sound? Like when you put your sound into the timeline is it set to "Event" or "Stream"? Make sure you set it to "Stream". It helps a ton when trying to sync your sound to your animation.

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Score: 2 / 10

Score: 2

"What?"

submission: Fusion

date: March 29, 2009

Pros:
+1 Flash was original.
+2 The animation was decent.
+2 Nice art and graphics.
+1 Sound was ok.

Cons:
-2 There was no real story.
-1 It wasn't funny/ thought provoking/ sad/ etc.
-1 The idea of this flash wasn't all that clear and somewhat random.

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Score: 2 / 10

Score: 7

"Looks nice"

submission: Grocery Shopping

date: March 29, 2009

Pros:
+3 There was a story!
+1 It had some funny in it.
+1 Flash was original.
+2 The animation was decent.
+3 For sound and voice.

Cons:
-1 No shading to be found.
-2 Art could use more detail (Feathers, blades of grass, drawing actual things on the store shelves)

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Score: 7 / 10